You Think This Is Good?

[meman97]

I just wanted to know if anyone thinks this is a good story starter (plz do forgive any spelling or gramma problems):

The sky started to darken over the peaceful city, families gathered around their dinner tables to dine. The warm summer airs cooled bring freshness to the city. As the city covered in darkness street lights came on bathing the streets in light. In the middle of the city stood a building, no one in the city knew what it was for. All the windows were covered up, doors we locked no lights came on at night yet power was still being used. The city mayor stated that the building was under plans to be used as telecom building, after this the people of the city forgot about the building and no one asked any more about it.

[Ashe]

It's pretty good. I'd run it through a a grammar check (for stuff like this: The warm summer airs cooled bring freshness to the city. Instead it should be: The warm summer air cooled, bringing a freshness to the city.), but other than that it's pretty good. Keep up the good work.

[Leon S. Kennedy]

Looks fine beside a few grammar errors, but a good way to start. Hopefully you'll continue it.

[meman97]

Thxs, Ill make sure to fix it all up, and ill will be going on with it. GOD i hate Gramma! who needs ut anyway!??!?!?! Not me

[Ashe]

Just write it in a program like Word that has a spelling and grammar check. Set your preferences to have it check for everything you can. Now while this will also pick up on things that you want a certain way, just click the ignore rule and don't change it. It's better to be safe than sorry... No one likes to read something that is riddled with spelling errors or grammar mistakes. Also make sure you double space between paragraphs. No walls of text.

But as I said earlier, tis a very good start. I eagerly await more.

[meman97]

Thxs Miss Scarlett, lol it was in word. O well, ill just get people to read over it for me lol

[Ashe]

You may not have had grammar checked as one of the checks when you run a spell check. Go to the options and you should be able to turn that on. Also unlike spelling errors (with the squiggly red line), grammar errors aren't noticeable unless you actually run the spell check manually.

[Spartan198]

Jan 22, 2009 5:41:50 GMT -5 Ashe said:

Also unlike spelling errors (with the squiggly red line), grammar errors aren't noticeable unless you actually run the spell check manually.

They're automatically pointed out in Microsoft Word, which is what I use. It's annoying, though, because it seems to flag things that actually aren't grammatical errors, such as changing "ma'am" to "ma'Am", which I've looked up multiple times and never saw like that.

[Ashe]

That's what I meant. Spelling errors are flagged automatically, but grammar isn't. You have to manually run the spell check to get it to do that, that is assuming you have it set to check grammar. If not, then you need to set it to do that in the options.