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Post by Claire redfield on Aug 6, 2008 10:59:36 GMT -5
It all started the event of the day that came to raccoon city a plague that brung death to people turning them into creatures that were called zombies... Claire Redfield was stopped by people in a car telling her to not go that way she looked around and saw people moaning and blood around their faces. ''S**t, Not again!''. She quickly ran over grabbing her gun out of the car.
Could anything else go wrong?
Just as she said that the truck came down the speedway so fast it managed to tip over and cause gas leaking and it started to set on fire,''Oh my god!!''. Claire jumped out of the way and made cover of the truck beening on fire.
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Post by Leon S. Kennedy on Aug 7, 2008 19:17:56 GMT -5
Sounds like an interesting plot line, but does it take place in an alternate timeline to the Raccoon City incident or does the ,"It all started the event of the day that came to Raccoon City" reference 2 and 3?
Besides that I noticed a few spelling errors, capitalize a bit more, and also I noticed some words were out of order, and example being, It all started the event of the day, which should be 'It all started the day a plague came to Raccoon City that brought death to people, turning them into creatures called zombies....
I'm not trying to be a nitpicker, just trying to help as a writer to a writer.
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Post by Spartan198 on Mar 5, 2009 11:48:09 GMT -5
Closing. If you wish it to be reopened, contact me or Scarlett.
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